Apocalipse No Mundo De Magia

Essa é minha primeira novel, não sou muito bom nisso então aceito qualquer crítica construtiva que me ajude a evoluir. This is my first novel, I'm not very good at it, so I'll take any constructive criticism that helps me evolve The image is not original of mine, I found it but I didn't find the author, if you are the author and want me to retire, let me know.