let_me7
From the synopsis, I see that you have an interesting plan for the story. The plot is intriguing, I wonder how you will show Leonardo's struggle for feelings and sympathy, Sam. So I'm waiting for more... ;) Don't worry about errors. Every serious writer has an editor who cares about the consistency of the text, flow, grammar, etc., but here, we do most of the things ourselves.
Ok, my favorite character is the child. She's too cute. The writing can be a bit shaky. Sometimes I feel like you lack some "Show". I feel like you "Tell" too much. It can be a bit cramped. There are typos that you can easily fix, do give your chaps another read. Example: missing capital letters. Storywise, so far so good. Can't judge much from the chaps as of now. However, there is clearly some work on the character development and background. It shows a bit of planning. I left you one or two comments for you to improve some stuff. I hope it helps. Keep up the good work. (5 stars because you gave yourself a 4 four stars xD hahaha)
Very nice plot. The world background and the character development is amazing. I’m absolutely in love with Samantha, she’s a charming little ray oc sundhine😉😉🤗🤗. I love everything about it. The only thing I think the author has to work on is the punctuations. Aside from this, this story is really good. Good job, author.👏👏👏👏
I love the way this story takes time to really develop the female lead. In all stories, but in particular romance stories, characters are the most important component and the author definitely seems to realize this. The first chapter did a terrific job at establishing the protagonist's personality, backstory and present situation. She is hard working and comes from a privileged family, but struggling being a single parent and juggling a life and work balance. Perfect scenario for her to find love and help overcome this obstacle. Chapter two takes the reader inside the protagonist's working life as her boss takes a valuable client off her and sets her up with a new one who I am guessing will eventually be the male lead and love interest? Anyway, this is a really good read so far. It is well-written and the author knows where they are going. All the right building blocks are in place for this one to be a classic.