King_Noran
Author here, Just wanna let the viewers know that I minimalized the use of {brackets} due to complaints about it. Thank you so much for your insights. Please, do not hesitate to point more things out. As the author, it's my duty to give you all the best experience. Leave a review or a paragraph comment. Don't worry if I don't reply, I read them! Much love.
Delightful use of words that was very playful to read. It mesmerized my tongue as I have read it. Detailed imagery that captivates one's mind and soul. I believe with more chapters, this will become big for sure. The author was an excellent writer by far and how much more when he grows and learn more. I would say, outstanding! Now fellow readers, mark my words. This will get its praise in due time. I say we win this thing and bring home the bacon!
This story is fairly good. The character development is impressive, and the building of words? Amazing. Great work. But there is one thing-the readatibility. I noticed that the story gets hard to understand from time to time. Not recommended for someone under 13. And sometimes the world background gets a bit confusing. Apart from this, good job. Keep up.
This clearly shows the world-building in the first chapter itself. In the beginning, the story might confuse you. But, overall writing slowly define everything. This story shows great potential for growth. I do like how the paragraphs are sometimes more sparse as they elicit a sort of mystery when the sentences are left hanging.
I am impressed by the standard of English writing in the novel. It clearly shows the world-building in the first chapter itself. And we can see MC has to face multiple trials to solve the mysteries behind his unknown background. With a well-outlined plot and interesting characters, this novel is a must-read.
This story shows great potential for growth. I do like how the paragraphs are sometimes more sparse as they elicit a sort of mystery when the sentences are left hanging. I was glad to see that some of the actual sounds are replaced by onomatopoeia in the later chapters but maybe try not to utilise them so much as although they are great tools to have in writing, some of the magic effects will be lost when used superfluously. The world-building is great and is the best part of the novel.
Writing Quality: Awesome, can't write better myself. Stability of Updates: Pretty stable. Story Development: Going good. Character Design: Needs a bit improvement but still intriguing. World Background: The best part the author established. Overall, great job author! Keep on going and I highly recommend this book to every reader!
This story, is a masterpiece. There are some misuse of metaphors, phrasing, and punctuation, but overall the story made sense and flowed beautifully. One of my favourite parts was the beginning with the simile, making the comparison between aphrodite - and what I assumed to be - a flower called evelyn.
I don't know why people saying character development is unclear or bad or something, its solid to me. His metaphors are a bit, yk, much. "Her eyes mirror of Kaguya, the brightest moon" Was so good, and i didn't know blood-red moon meant Akatsuki, i thought it was Tsukuyomi. Well except for all that, world-building is also solid, character interactions are also good but could use a bit of improvement