Anotoki
Okay, so... This novel will be really successful in the future. The details and writing quality is very well done. There are a few grammatical errors though. The story is clearly amazing from the beginning. The characters are also very well written and the world background plus the action sequences is just beautiful.
Well then, I am not the biggest reader of system type of stories or isekai, but I do read a few like Shield hero, Arifureta, Re:zero, or Overlord. With that said let's begin, shall we. First off, the setting, it's very well done and quite the attention grabber right from the start, now the characters they are well made, well written, engaiging and funny! Now, the writting is good, but it needs work grammar wise (and don't get the wrong idea, I am a strong believer that bad grammar, dosen't hinder a story, nor renders it like many say "unreadable" That is not something that in my opinion hinders a good story and it can be fixed with ease, and me too I make mistakes, lot's of them) All in all, this is a good story with great potencial, and don't let the few grammar mistakes will ruin it for you! As for the Author keep it going, my friend you have something good here!
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Interesting Book. Well done Author The novel has a good plot and is promising. I love the pacing of the novel and the way writer writes the story. The writer is successful in appealing to the readers . At last the novel is overall nice and will desperately wait for the next chapters to release And hope that the writer will continue this awesome work and will evolve even more with time . Mine best wishes are always with you .[img=recommend][img=recommend]
Hey there. I really like your book and want to witness you becoming a successful author. I'm not much of a great author but I think I can call myself a low level author. Well then, please follow some of my tips and you might reach your goal. First of all, you should increase the updating stability of your novel. Please upload at least two to three chapters per week. You can also decrease the word count for a single chapter. I would recommend you to create a chapter which contains almost 1000-1900 words ,not more than that. You should also improve your Grammar. You should download some apps like gramarly which would definitely help you. After creating a chapter, before uploading it, you should read it completely for once and correct any grammatical mistake or punctuation error. Now that's for all, I really like the concept of your novel. I would love to read more chapters. ;)
Nice to meet you fellow Daoist, I don't know how to say it. Your way to toss good ideas one after another to the story is like someone that I know that said drawing a long plot is just bothersome. It will be interesting to just make an interesting short plot, and then find a suitable path to continue the story. It is a good way to write. And It will be fun. the reader will find the story is like a roller coaster, and it is addicting. My only suggestion is don't make a plot that will make your protagonist too strong. You will find it difficult to make opponents who is stronger than him. And the story will stuck. It was a fun novel. Thanks...
Don't mind me, just self-rating my own book, and oh yeah, if you wondering what this book about and worried that you waste time reading it, I can assure you that this book is worth your time, and maybe you could learn a thing or two. What kind of book doesn't leave advice or morale? Anotoki P.S. If my work different than what you imagine, I am very sorry!