To be fair, I know the author so my review will be pretty biased.. I've read the version over on Wattpad. I can tell you that the she has made significant progress. The previous one was so rushed. She told me that she planned on wrapping it up early, so I understand why the pacing was like that. This version is easier to swallow, and the conflicts that'll happen will hopefully be resolved without rushing. Her grammar has improved by a lot. The previous one was readable, but this one is much more pleasing to read. The only thing I would critique is the overuse of commas. The sentences are very long, it may not be to everyone's tastes. The romance got cut down (?) I haven't seen any of the boys appear although it's been 35 chapters. Not a bad thing though. Keep up the good work :)) P.S: Now you don't have to think about the chapter names anymore do you??? HMMM???
Read interesting. The text block is amazing, there are minor errors, but in general they do not spoil the story itself much. I just started reading it, but I liked it, so I included it in my library. So far these are my impressions. As I read more chapters, I will supplement my review! Thanks to the author for such a wonderful story!