Bethrezhen
Author- im not really a person who likes to critics someone but here I’m gonna say, I feel like your story doesn’t even have any development you just made him into a fucking beta characters, you see here I’m a person who hates writer who keeps following the original seriously. Plus what kind of dumbass are you he was once a human never gotten into a relationship you need to understand psychology that if a person been living to long with no comfort they will their mind unless they have problem I get that he did made some friends and many more(achievements) but you make it into a slow life novel, never seen progress only being a fucking slave, and many more. Give up writing if you don’t know how to write, it’s like those typical Japanese characters to dense, this day even a child understand a relationship. Why I call it trash there are many things where he doesn’t get into a relationship, like he is too inexperienced, revenge(but he doesn’t have s rival even in revenge their is still relationship) only I could think of is that those people who have no worth living- fix your novel or just dropped it
This story started out really interesting, however the longer it went on the more boring it has become. In most of his different bodies the MC is something of a beta, only his Dragon persona is really interesting, he is also seemingly asexual. The author seems to be afraid of meaningfully altering the main story line.
The novel started off very well and the original characters introduced (Besides the mc) are all pretty good, the problem is that the MC has very little EQ to the point that a girl he's known in at least three of his lives who constantly tries to get him to look at her is disregarded completely. The absolute worst part and breaking point for me causing me to stop reading this is that he literally gives his harem candidates to Issei! (A girl he saved and trained for years is constantly pushed away from him and he actually helps Issei not only get close to her but go on dates with him as well.) This novel has become a NTR fetishist's dream.
Alright so plus points first. It updates regularly so yeah. It also has an OVERPOWERED MC. The previous lives of the MC are also very entertaining from what we have seen so far. . . Now to the negative points. The first thing is what’s the point. Like what the absolute **** is he even doing? Went to the devils for a while for what reason? Wanted a house in Kuoh for what reason? Helped the 2 Romeo and Juliet escape for what reason? He literally wasted the wishes. Give me all my weapons of my lives. WTF bro just get magic of creation or something. Not like your character isn’t op enough. Basically whatever he is doing makes no fucking sense whatsoever. Also he is a douchebag. Like there is scum like a certain character from Against the gods novel and there is this guy. He is so passive, I mean if he does think of her as a daughter and now she is clearly interested in him as a romance partner, make it clear to her it won’t be happening. But no, let me ignore this cuz it always fucking works~ It might have been amusing at the start but now he just seems like a bastard for ignoring someone so devoted to him. Casually goes on trips for long periods of time without taking her. Why?? Atleast give a reason. The Character also has no dept. The previous lives are just that. Previous. It’s like he is a totally different guy. Story development till now is zero. Character is also zero. The world development that I was thinking about is also as of yet, zero only places introduced till now is Kuoh, underworld and Kyubbi? palace. . . . . I expected a lot from reading some of the reviews but clearly most of don’t know how to differentiate between quality level works. My advice to Author is to actually read some bedtime stories. They have more character development than yours has had till now.
The beginning was interested about him having four lives and all of them were very interesting. The picked a stereotypical anime world were he will build a harem and crap,harems are so annoying. The people who will say the MC will not try to build a herem in this world well here is what I have to say to you guys,the anime is DXD of course there will be a harem. So all and all amazing start with the four lives and stuff but the rest of it is pure crap.
Now the story is different from other fanfics, I have to say that's a good strong point of this novel. Sadly the writing quality and grammar can be bad at times, bringing the overall reading experience down. The updates were common before a few days ago, it's annoying for a sudden stop with no explanation. The character design is good but it focuses a lot on the mc and not the other characters also it repeats a lot, you learn a few things now and then but mostly we "find out" something we already knew making it annoying at times. The world is good but then again this is a fanfic, the only reason it has a good rating is because you at least have stayed true to the anime.
Character design is good, but there are too many plot holes where MC acts for no reason. I like that you give the MC background which has 4 lives, but when looking at the progress of the story, I find it a bit boring. I hope this criticism will make for an improvement in the way you write. Thank you for your efforts in making this fanfic.