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Reviews of A new life (Highschool Dxd x Naruto) ( Itachi Uchiha )

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A new life (Highschool Dxd x Naruto) ( Itachi Uchiha )

Lukas_Blast

  • Overall Rate
  • Writing Quality
  • Updating Stability
  • Story Development
  • Character Design
  • world background

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Traps_Are_Gay
Traps_Are_GayLv5Traps_Are_Gay

Writing Quality 1*- It's just terrible spelling, grammar and spacing; as for spacing the author either does a chapter where he spaces between every single punctuation or he just stuffs 10 paragraphs into one long sentence with no quotations to indicate speech. Story Development 1*- extremely predictable "plot" with unrealistic and unnatural situations/events such as Zeoticus asking a low class devil to be friends with his daughter, Gremory treat their servants best in the underworld but that's in comparison to literal slaves who can be r*ped, murdered or toyed with at will. Character Design 1*- would give 0* if possible why is it every itachi in another world isn't itachi!! The biggest red flag for me was itachi "saving" rias from riser and hitting him itachi would not be foolish enough to implicate himself and his family especially when nothing bad would happen to rias in her own home. That's not the worst though characters don't act like themselves, they act unnaturally and say stupid xianxia lines Christ; anyone with a working brain won't get past chapter 4. Updating Stability 2*- It's new with a cool 9 chapters World Background 1*-I hate fanfics with no world Background it's literally already done for you are you guys too lazy to read a wiki or copy and paste some background and landmarks??? Overall 1.2*- I wouldn't recommend however if you're someone who doesn't mind what's mentioned above nock yourself out. Advice to author- even if English isn't your first language the writing feels like no effort was put in; firstly read some professional novels to see the spacing and dialogue, also download grammarly if you can't afford premium get a mod APK/hacked version. "English isn't my first language" isn't an excuse for authors to put out stuff like this there are tools to help you just need to put in more effort.

Man_of_culture
Man_of_cultureLv4Man_of_culture

Bro, I am having a stroke reading this... First, where are the quotation marks???? How can someone even write direct conversations without quotation marks? Second, the grammar is just plain bad. Third, the punctuation is just non-existing. Oh and have I mentioned the spacing? There is a space between every word, comma, and dot...

Milen_ium
Milen_iumLv1Milen_ium

I really like the story and the idea of Itachi beeing reborn in the DxD word after his death. The only „small“ problem for me is the hardcore nerf that he got. I am a big Itachi fan and my hearth bleeds when I read that somebody got out of his Tsukoyomi. Keep writing

Droopy7
Droopy7Lv1Droopy7

Problematic language & story development is a joke and nothing more than that! .................................................................,..............

xiaomin_Ye101876
xiaomin_Ye101876Lv2xiaomin_Ye101876

i just read the first chapter i am excited for the next. also can you give a hint on what power god gave him.

void999sharma
void999sharmaLv3void999sharma

it is soooooooo goooooooooooooooood . I loveeeeeeeeeeeee ittttttttttt.❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

Mihai_Ionut
Mihai_IonutLv1Mihai_Ionut

The story is good, not boring at all, some parts of it were like... Is this really Itachi ? But then I was thinking that 90% of the fan fiction in general who are not OC are like this, no matter how much you know a character, you are not the author of the manga, you don't really know how we would react in that situation, but you've done good bro and with the grammar,i've seen far worse,much worse, but the later chapters you started to improve it,don't listen to the haters, they would hate no matter what.

Retro_
Retro_Lv3Retro_

Ngl, This story sucks...And I have read same story in wattapad too... .......................................................................

Ashborn2271
Ashborn2271Lv3Ashborn2271

The whole servant of the gremory, fighting the phenex clan getting exiled, meeting akeno seems gotced why of all countries didhe end up in Japan and so as that he met akeno and sun goku, what about gid skills and training in the earlier chapters theres not much, it seems ur forecfully trying to follow canon, but then whats the benefit of itachi be reincarnated, he doens t have any goals or plans he says he wants to join the army and then what, the planning seems a bit russhed, sorry if i was a bit harsh,but i want you to succeed. Good luck

Noname126
Noname126Lv2Noname126

So far so good keep up the good work .............................................................................,........................

Gd_Sys
Gd_SysLv2Gd_Sys

Moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeerreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

lcario
lcarioLv3lcario

well i dun really mind about the grammars since I've read worst ones haha. at least this one is readable since i could fix the grammars in my head as i read through it. I like this fanfic since i like itachi. he a chad lol. anyway keep it up

LegeNDDD
LegeNDDDLv1LegeNDDD

Well, this is something new... I read a lot of fan fictions about Itachi ( My fav character from Naruto, coming from the same guy with one of the best fan fictions about Game of Thrones is a blessing