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Quoting the title I'm really looking forward for the story to justifiably fit tp that. Talking about the plotline it's for the fantasy lovers who wants the fusion of action. The actionscript is really compelling along with the world background matched to it. The error lies with the punctuations as there aren't any stops or pauses to indicate the structural analysis of the story. Yet it's readability is fine with the good vocabulary. ❤
I read this up to chapter 13 I did not know what to expect when I read the synopsis, but once I read the story, it was pretty impressive. The author did an excellent job with writing on the world background. The description was good and vivid. The story definitely has potential. I don't usually mind grammar and misspellings, but I hope the author can look at the punctuations. Also, some of the paragraphs were too long. It would be good if you can break them up into shorter sections. Good luck, author!
This is Brandon gould I am responding to a review swap for this book so you can give a review on my book. First off I think it is a good book and I liked the chapters I read, But in my own opinion I think your MC is a Gary Stew. A Gary Stew is the male version of a Mary Sue. Now I read up to the fourth chapter. I think the world you created is very unique and interesting. Your MC can be overpowered but he needs weakness. I think he is a gary stew is because he has no flaws, Your MC is God and you have made a MC that can't die, or loss must pepole would find that type of MC boring. A Overpowered MC can be done you just got to let the bad guys beat up your MC and give him some weakness Just giving my opinion Hope to see that review
Liking the story so far. The author described the realms well and was very vivid in narrating the scenes. Though I am not into fantasy novels, this got me interested. My only comment so far is the lack of the use of punctuations, particularly a period. Still, it did not affect how the story was told so it's not a big deal.
I am looking forward to this one. I stumbled on to it while browsing comments. I am adding it to my library for now but I will read it when I get time. And I would like to add one thing, It would be better if you could add a few more details to synopsis. So that it will become easy for people to know about the story. And though I never read about adventure but it will be interesting.
This is an interesting story that is certainly worth your time. The world building is solid with mechanics and rules that help flesh out the tale. The main MC is a cool guy too. I did notice a few grammar errors but they don't really break the flow of your reading so it's no big issue. As an action-adventure tale, I give this novel the two-thumbs up and recommend it. Keep up the good work, author. :)
The premise of the story is depicted clearly. The world building is accordingly, as everything is explained in great detail for the reader. Sadly, the quality of the grammar is rather poor. I believe this work has the potential to grow into more, but on the condition that the overall quality improves. I wish you a lot of fun writing the rest of your story.