Reviews of A Fool's Change of Heart
A Fool's Change of Heart
RealSam11
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Sam great fucking work bro i don't read game fanfics but you did it you madlad you fucking made it give yourself a prize as you fucking did it
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If not for the weak start and the brief hiatus this story would be five stars. The author has some very obvious passion for the series and solid writing chops. I really recommend you muscle through the first dozen or so chapters because once Shin gets some personality he becomes a hugely likable protagonist. Word of warning though, this story becomes a Fate crossover out of the blue when the protagonist encounters Shirou Emiya. As of yet nothing has come of it, but the protagonist is preparing for battling it out in Type-Moon. Also the author toes the line for all you harem seekers and anti harem retards. He seems to be skilled enough at character interaction that he could pull off a harem without it feeling bland. I think that is really all that matters in that flame war I seem to come across on this platform so often. You can either pull it off or you can't.
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pretty similar to basic persona 5, but with changes just not at the first like 3 chapters so it's exactly how you expect a fanfic to be. the same story with some minor, and major changes it's dope af p.s I haven't finished what you've posted, but I do have a question who's the love interest/interests?
I like the fact that you are writing a Persona ff. The way combat happens might need a bit more description, since most Person fans have only played the games, but it’s only the first dozen chapers for me and i am sure things will change in the future. The subtle changes in the story so far are good. Saving Shiho is a definite plus and not just avoiding the suicide scene completely was good. Only problem is how much off the dialogue is coming directly from the game. But i do understand that it is the tutorial part of the game, so creative freedom is limited. Hoping more off-script interactions will happen in the future. Persona 5 Royal and breaking a certain piece of shits arm was greatly appreciated. Hope you keep writting and don’t get tired since this is a good read.
