Reborn as Darkfey in Twilight

I thought it was good at the beginning but don't like where it is heading. Please don't tell me he ends up with Rosalie instead of Alice. She is used. Nasty!

Honestly, I like the concept quite a bit. I've read several of your previous fanfics, and although most of them aren't finished, the idea of a Maleficent Dark Fate is very appealing to me. That said, I didn't end up reading all the published chapters because I eventually reached a point where I simply couldn't continue. I think the main issue is the protagonist's relationship with the Cullens and, to a lesser extent, with the werewolves. The impression I got is that many potentially interesting conflicts are skipped through extremely convenient solutions provided by the Multiverse Grimoire. For example, the problem of inexperienced new werewolves is solved by literally bringing back the spirits of their ancestors so they can pass down decades of combat experience. On paper, that sounds cool, but narratively it doesn't add much. It doesn't develop the characters, create conflict, or force anyone to grow. It simply removes a problem. And that's something that happens constantly. Vampires have trouble with sunlight? Spell. Vampires can't eat human food? Spell. A limitation appears? Spell. Another limitation appears? Another spell. Eventually it feels like there's a perfect solution for every imaginable problem, and that removes a huge amount of the story's dramatic tension. The problem isn't that the protagonist is powerful. The problem is that he seems to have access to infinite answers for infinite situations. And when that happens, conflicts stop feeling like real obstacles. At a certain point, you start wondering why there isn't simply a spell that can mentally control supernatural creatures and instantly solve the conflict with the Volturi, who, as far as I've read, are the story's primary antagonists. This also affects the supporting cast. Since everyone revolves around the protagonist, they benefit from the same convenient solutions. The result is that much of the cast starts to feel like a collection of Gary Stus and Mary Sues whose problems disappear before they can generate any real consequences. The other major issue, at least for me, is how the soulmate concept is handled. And here I think there's a significant difference between what many people interpret and what I personally took away from Twilight. I've always felt that Twilight vampires become emotionally frozen at the moment of their transformation. It's not that some magical force compels them to love a specific person. It's that once they develop deep feelings, changing them becomes incredibly difficult. If they love someone, they'll continue loving that person for decades or even centuries. If they hate someone, the same thing applies. That's why the relationships feel so absolute. Not because of some instant metaphysical connection, but because once a profound feeling forms, changing it becomes extraordinarily difficult. Here, however, the relationship gave me a very different impression. The protagonist sees Rosalie once, falls in love almost immediately, asks her out, and the relationship progresses at an incredible speed. And the issue isn't the speed itself. The issue is that I don't feel like the relationship is being built. I don't see enough moments where the characters get to know each other, connect, build trust, or share experiences that emotionally justify what they're feeling. The narration tells me they're in love, but it rarely shows me why. And I think that's the story's central problem. Many things are explained. Many things are stated. But very few things are gradually built in front of the reader. At the end of the day, any story lives or dies by its ability to show rather than tell. And I think that's this story's biggest weakness.

seems like another transmigrator who'll end up as a babysitter.