Hi Author, I appreciate your effort, but I feel the story could use some improvement. It seems a bit rushed and inconsistent. The protagonist feels overpowered, yet they don’t use their abilities effectively. Perhaps you could focus on giving them just one or two powers and exploring those in depth. Alternatively, if they’re meant to be very powerful, consider showing them dominating their challenges in a way that feels earned. Also, please check for grammatical errors to improve readability. Keep up the hard work!
