Story has potential, that is the most that I can say about it. How does the author blooms the potential is upto him but I really do hope that it blooms good.
Good work author the writing is good but too emtion focused, and the story is slow, like hella slow, and slow stories tends to get droped as the author just runs out of the juice too early.
Anyway increasing pace and perhaps more non emotional writing are the only advice I can give at the moment.
