Harry Potter : The Unfinished Battle

As the Poison Tester, it is my duty to review Harry Potter fics, and this one cured my cancer. It's just excellent in every way. The premise is that Harry Potter from the end of book 7 transmigrates into a parallel dimension where his alternate self dies in a car crash. Everything added is perfectly compatible to the lore of the original books. There's one part where the author forgets about the Black family motto being French, but it's an extremely minor detail. Everything is perfect, so it's pretty impressive that the only thing I could nitpick at is that Harry is est more chatty than he is in the books, but that's completely fine. I recommend.

I really enjoy the story but is there actually a system? I noticed the tag stated system so I was just curious. Thank you!

It’s ok honestly I mean the premise is decent but it a story that lacks any emotion in their conversation. You can’t really get behind the story because everyone feels like a robot and the author isn’t great a grasping what characters would act or do in certain situations. Kinda bland story

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Has a good idea backing it but the execution is flawed. Hermione being forced into the plot by making her a Slytherin is dumb, she'd have been horribly jinxed her 1st night alone. Throwing in the fact that you take a full chapter and cut it into 4 parts to act like you have more written than what you actually do and this story doesn't rate over 3 stars

Totally idiotic, starting was good .after that everything gone down to drain ...........................................................................................