MHA: One-Hit Hero

Hello! I'm still new to writing, there are still loopholes in the story. There would be some grammatical errors since English isn't my primary language. The story development needs some refining, I read one of the comments and I completely agree. My fic doesn't have that depth ya know? I'm more focused on the world background rather than the main character and the characters feel off. I'll refine that aspect, as well as the fighting scenes and other essentialities to improve my story. I have a lot of free time since it's summer vacation, that's why I'm updating like crazy. I still have tons to improve, that's why I'm rating myself 4.4 (Come on, even if I'm lacking I wouldn't rate myself a 1, spare me) (The gif is my face when I'm writing new chapters)

I don't think the author has ever seen Crush magic, nor has he even read the wiki. His version is pretty much just One for All from Walmart

From where I've read up to, I can see that there really isn't a lot of depth here. The interactions with characters feel one dimensional, and it feels like the author is just ticking a list of things that happened during the episode in which the chapter takes place. The main character is weird as well. It's like he has a complete switch when he gets into U.A. he's rude and threatened to use his quirk, which can put a hole in nomu's chest, on a bunch of random people because they were annoying him. Update stability is great. it might be why the chapters feel so lacking, though. I recommend the author to slow down and think about how he can make this fanfic unique.

El personaje es muy antipático y no quiere cambiar la trama. Quiere ser un Héroe pero siempre está aburrido y no muestra interés por las cosas de héroe, como si lo hiciera por obligación.

I'll be giving my opinion, take it as a hate or an insult but this story feels lackluster. the power Itself like many said just feels like one for all instead of actual crush magic, but the story at first stick with the original and then tried to bend their own at the UA festival arc, which for me feels kinda forced. like if you were given a metal pan and told to cook an egg and you somehow bend the pan. like I said, take it as you may, this can be a hate or just opinion. honest take on this story is I'm basically confuses on what is going on:

Started good but becamed edgy and cringe and then author made the original body owner come back and destroy everything.... unless ur an edgelord or a masochist don't read

dear author please never write a story again please give up you aren't good enough I hope you get bullied and never write again I can't stant the split personality twist it's stupid amd makes no sense so please once again give up this life ain't for you

it was good but went off the cliff like right away why do you need to Nerf already nerf charector and the weak body thing is so old got bored halfway please good story if you don't have brain and just because you gave him the power of a character does not mean he has to be a carbon copy of that person author you have failed

I wish I never read this. It’s just a one for all knock off

to be completely accurate, this is more a power fantasy than a fanfiction. it's cool to turn your brain off and read but the character kinda doesn't exist. you could replace the mc with literally anyone else and nothing would change.

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Very good fanfic and I really like it you should give a new chapter soon.................................... .................. .................. .................. .................. .................. .................. .................. ..................

Good story so far. Keep it up. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

Hey when are you going to update a new chapter been waiting for a while. Fanfic is good and i hope u don't drop it and continue writing it. Hope to see a new chapter as soon as possible.

lame quirk only able to use once a day. no matter how OP it is just throw 2 strong villian at him hes dead.

very good premises. I like the idea behind it and the grammar is good and easy to read. I have many problems with the many incogruency with the world building like the USJ . if he fix those I think it'll be make it a very solid read.

nice . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

Awesome fanfiction recommended to everyone who loves mha