MHA: The Green Blur

Balancing out Masashiro's horrible review

I'm really tired of deku[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

If you have never seen the flash tv show, you may like it. Quite a big plot hole in the second ch, I mean how can someone who’s quirk is to see the truth not able to tell that dekus father didn’t kill his mom? The reason they gave is bs. Enough evidence? For christs sake, you can see who’s lying. That should trump whatever “evidence” there is. Bakugo and his mom both act like normal people instead of constantly yelling at each other. I feel the author messed up their characters. It really does feel very similar to just the flash tv show but with deku being nstead of Barry. It’s only been a few Chs and I’ve already seen barry needs to faster or I mean deku needs to faster. It’s going to get old. The story is done on fanfiction.net and it looks like it will follow season one of the flash instead of going after mha which kind of sucks. The reverse flash is in this which blows. Some may like it but I feel it wasn’t needed.

I like the way you combined flash's orgin story with deku's

Literally zero imagination. They took the script from the Flash tv series, MHA, and then stuck them together. NOTHING CHANGES in the storyline aside from it being Midoriya going through Barry's starting point. Character design is 1 because they changed no character traits. Story development is 1 because they changed nothing in the story outside the two bits they merged. World background is exactly the same as MHA, so another 1. I honestly wish I could give a 0 on those three.

there are a couple of glaring issues that can be fixed one in the beginning if you use a character with a truth detector quirk they would determine izukus dad not to have done the crime so you should have both parents killed otherwise that's just a big plot hole which would require rewriting some of this but the more you write using broken logic in the story the more you would need to change for the edited version should you write one

very bad it's not flash quirk in mha but flash story in mha the author try to adapt the story but it's more force the story. so many hole in the story that it's not possible in the world of mha and some time you have a chapter with just ≈ 15 ligne

Not a terrible story but absolutely nothing original or anything that could be considered creative or sincere on the author's part. just combined two stories together. killed off the mom like every other fanfic and to top it off the chapters are insanely short. you'd think you'd have a lot of material to pull from, not just one story, but two. Nothing to keep me interested enough to stick around sadly even tho I love both stories separately.