Yeah okay this is pretty cringe..MC act super unnatural, and very odd. He clearly can't keep a conversation with anyone if he talks like that. The library of heaven's path which i was looking forward to was used in an incredibly boring way.
Overall, the MC is trash. And not the good kind. The story seems to be him just chasing chicks, which might fit some people. I was hoping for more.
You need to work on how to write both descriptive text and most importantly dialogue. It just doesn't flow well anywhere and nobody talks like actual people.
