Comments of chapter undefined of House Tarth (SI) Fanfiction

Good MC and Story Development, just beware of potlicking and jealous lords of surrounding lands. Dance of the Dragons, 101 Great Council and HIGH TIDE FF-Novel is good one for a reference in medieval fantasy politic after Succession Law and Non-Targaryen Dragonrider happen-ed. Citadel-StarrySept-Hightower really force the realm to be Stagnant and Dependant on them.

it is definitely improving but paraghraphs are still too long if ypu can make them more and short it would be easier to read. also there are some places where punctuations can be used better. other than that it is a good novel.

can you skip the traveling please

This is how he would look like but with more amour with red and blue coloring.

This is where our lands will be. Morne