Comments of chapter undefined of Dual Cores: Mage's Conquest

The synopsis is very long, the clarification was not bad but you repeated many words that in the end ended up boring me and skip directly to the chapter

vry long and interesting chapter. Hope to read more!

ooooh...a nice and interesting beginning^^

the story started off really smooth, the start was suspencefull You did a very good job!but the paragraph, and spacing became less and less as the story progressed.Breaking your paragraphs into smaller pieces would make it even better, and a slower pace would be preferable.loving so far will continue to read.

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