It's actually decent, but a few tips to help you, first, as you are doing a SI, the one rule you must follpw, is to never, ever, make your oc tell their secret of being a reincarnator. That's a huge red flag, second don't do Diologue like this. Nathan: something something. Do it like, Nathan said, "Yada yada" or something similair but never like if it were a script instead of a story. And finally, when you write the character, try to not only write them as the age they are when you write them, but also try to write them as hoe they acted in the show. But overall I like it so far.
