Look, I don't usually read percy jacson ffs. but that looks nice and looks like you're going to do well. It wasn't very nice of you to tell us about your future plan and give us spoilers in the first chapter, also the name of the book (I'm talking about the pjo part ( and the cover could be better. I frankly liked the writing style. the conversations and the story are very fluent. I hope you continue to write. good luck. - part 2 -