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Mc is Royal Blood & he will keep it pure with power.
I think the mc needs to be older in the scene where he rewires his fathers mind. like 9-12 NOT 4. it gives time for his quirk to plausibly awaken like that(and makes it feel like he earned it.) You also immediately removed the only antagonist present removing all suspension for the period. I understand you want to audience to hate father but that'd be better achieved by having the abuse build up rather than having some mean words and this incident only where you just slapped the title of 'epstein product consumer' on him. The real issue is how mature the mc is talking to mother after this, literally giving her domestic abuse counselling. 1. this is eerie af and mc should act like a genius for his age, not an adult comforting a woman as a 4 year old. this is completely unreadable, any adult would be creeped the f out having a child say this. 2. Momo can't even talk properly yet (which makes the mc a creep instead and ruins any development the incident could have had on her character and the mc's relationship. You could improve this with minimal editing and maybe some earlier chapters to demonize father better than just outing him as a pedo. Anyhoozle, great novel concept—only reason I'm actually giving feedback. 5 stars if serious early issues addressed.
I have about 100 draft chapters and will continue to write, so you can expect a long read from this novel. Please read the auxiliary chapters to know what to expect from this novel lest you are triggered.
Story isn’t bad and neither is the grammar but i really disliked the main character’s personality.
First you need to understand father of the mc is a good guy in the canon ( main story / plot ) so don't truly hate him and for the sake of the story author made him seem as a bad person from the start so just to let you know .. .Not bad writing quality story development is in steady pace.character design is also okay .. I would not say it's fantastic / awesome but it's not bad . ( acceptable) world background is the same as we know with a little bit of twist .. it feels like mc didn't reincarnate in the mha world but different version of it with many different things from og Mha ( my hero academia )and obviously there's cultural stuff and mc has take responsibility for the family while his father is way.
Great story , the writing quality is good, the plot after some first chapter is logical with plausible and creative changes. As a fan of harem I rate the harem part 8/10. This is a slow pace story with an anti hero MC who good at using his brain, ruthless and very creative. You can think of him as a better version of Zeus that doesn't r@pe , has more brain cells and not as petty. The parts I dislike is how MC power was introduced in first chapters( it kinda too OP) and how the author too focus on Pedos crime
This is the third-best novel I have ever read. The first being MVS(of course). The second was one where the MC was reborn as a dungeon master and got a harem of legal lolis. A dragon girl a thousand years old and a vampire loli I don't remember her age though and a slime girl that wasn't legal so she wasn't a part of the harem.
It is good. I hate ff following the canon like a holy book and this is creative while keeping the good points of the series. ı would like better if there were more chapters but a chapter a day is good enough. Can't complain about that. Good job author. Keep it up
Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls. Autor-sama, no drop pls.
Good story with a very knowledgeable use of quirk, but I find it a bit boring to read. Hahahah maybe it's because I'm not interested in MHA's story, hehe sorry it's just my opinion. Thank you
The story is interesting, this fanfic has some better things than the original story, which is over for now. Does anyone know of any other fanfic that has Mirko (rabbit) as the main character's heroine? Looking and only found 1 that has Mirko (Rumi Usagiyama).
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Seems really nice, my only problem is that there are too many r 18 scenes that are also too long. May have dropped it but still, good work Author👍
Keeping the bloodline pure- Check Amazing Plot- Check Smart Mc- Check Although I would want more chappies, I know it is not easy to write them, sooooooo. I wish I could support the author but I am poor, sad face. Anyways, goood!
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Truthfully your synopsis got me hooked. So I look forward to it~ ............................................................................................
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