I feel like the book has potential. the authors first language isn't English so I understand the grammar and punctuation errors. But I feel like the book is too fast paced. I personally like their surroundings and features of characters to be described. not because it makes a bigger book but it allows me to imagine the characters and scenes better.
if the author fixes the world building and description issue, I am willing to help being his makeshift editor since English is my first language. for now, I'll just leave it in my library.
if there are changes, I'll update this review.