The writing quality needs better improvement as well as better grammar and vocabulary, the story development needs major improvements, seeing how fast you got the Mc together with Haley even when they are soulmates, especially so when you had the Mc pretty much confess his love for haley three hours after meeting each other, the character design is okay but sometimes you have to describe the characteristics instead of just posting a picture, it would have been better if you did both instead of doing only one of the two, the updating stability needs work since there's only 8 chapters for 1200 to 2000 words per chapter, and if I could I wouldn't even give the world background a star with how bad it is or the lack of.
