AnonymUser
Author, I noticed that your paragraphs get VERY long. Maybe you should pay attention on when to cut them to have better visibility. Since currently, some of your paragraps are so long that if I were to go out of the chapter an come back that I’d need to refind on where I was. Now imagine what happens when you accidentally click on another chapter just to get back to the current chapter that you are reading just for you to search on where you where at which would be a pain in the a*s. Get it? Anyway, thanks for the magic chapter! I like magic chapters so gimme more chapters!
I would like to see more similar chapters. But, I would like to know more about this game to which Vesuvius refers. I would also like to have several narratives from several persons. Well, in conclusion, I want to say that more paragraphs are needed, because a large amount of information makes it difficult to learn it. (is this world and the game the same thing?🤔) . The head is super, thank you!
No problem with the explanation of magic, but it feels like a lag is formed in the story, maybe either due to short chapters or less frequency. If you can't increase chapter frequency, at least try to include a portion of the story from other sides( like the Runic Enchanter story part). It will keep the storyline fresh in mind.
me personally do enjoy the learning process you describe. illustrative or descriptive writing is good in some points but not so in others. its situational. but alas every reader has their own preference so as a writer please take the bad along side the good for as long as someone reads what you have created its called a success. keep the good work coming.