I didn't read for long but the premise is interesting, the grammar is pristine, the story drags you in as you're quite detailed about your storytelling, how he ended there, his life, etc etc... you're quite detailed and that's great, I only say that possibly use a lot more paragraphs rather than packing up so many words and full stops in a single paragraph, it makes the content easier to read and modulate, hope you pass by and leave a review in my novels, thank you.