Kay Lillyt
Cute start about a story with siblings, hopefully this won't be a heavy drama, center around teens, if so I'm still down for it
It is well paced, digestible, colloquial language, with very familiar meditations of a young university student.
Nice start
Some parts need to be edited, other than that it's a good first chapter
An intriguing beginning for a novel, good job~~~
Dinámico inicio. Siempre me gusta lo cotidiano, famlliar y juvenil.
I think it's important to tell you that I was smiling throughout the entire chapter, nice start :)
interesting for a start nice one
