Only five chapters out and I can't really tell anything much about the story. The story is readable, very simple, and easy to understand. I mean, I am not a picky reader as long as I understand it. There are so many commas, though.
Thing is, even though the writing is good, the transition of scenes is too abrupt. There were expositions that are there when not needed, but then, things happen just for the heck of it. Hence, it feels forced, too sudden, and confusing.
Overall, I think it has an interesting premise. Good luck, author!