Comments of chapter undefined of A Nascent Kaleidoscope.

I saw what you said last chapter, and I did like it. There were a couple parts that were -- meh, but I think you hit the points you were trying to. I think it opens up for some good Character Development, and answers some questions I've personally had.

I dunno, it didn't really strike home with me. Felt like the problem should have been dealt with after he realized it was a fake. Felt kinda silly realizing that it was just preying on his insecurities and then falling for it anyways. Definitely not something that should come from a dude who inherited memories from zelretch.

ugh chapter, I do agree with most of what's spoken here, he has shallow relationships with about everyone except maybe shishou

In my humble(lol) opinion, the overall content - or the intent of the chapter - was finely done. The only thing to nitpick is that I was expecting more for his encounter with his father, something more of an in-your-face scenario where there will actually be repercussions to the Lucifer...but that's just me nitpicking.

Don’t care for it to be honest

50/50 i like what you did but i was hoping for the first time that he must confront his misgiving's for his father he would embarrass him in person or something of the like but this is a good way to build up to that as well.

how am I supposed to wait two days for

You all expected a power up but it was me, character development! It looks like Will is going to need character development by the end of this story, before long he'll be saying again that he should be training more and that he's being too lazy. In my honest opinion the story seems to be making him a kid at inappropriate times just to force the drama but ok

Oh boy, Mama Raikou is no amused with sperm donor Sirzechs. I have a feeling it's going to lead to a lengthy... discussion about being a good parent. Jeanne is looking conflicted af. The one person who went out of his way to help her is a literal son of Satan.

Thanks for the chapter. I found it very interesting the way the chapter tackles the problems of the MC and the way the chapter can be a critique of the classic harem fics pattern. And for those who found character development boring, useless or anything along those lines? you are entitled to your opinion. Of course you are also entitled to simply re-read the other pokemon harem fanfics with a low quality psychopathic MC.

this chapter could be used for character development. But I don't care and it's Annoying .

welp, hope he go back to dxd world and work on his insecurities. anyway thanks for the chapter

Thx for chap

wrong time and place for character development

I think it’s proper for the story development, if author doesnt want it to be just random pick ‘em all pokemon-harem fanfic. But personally I disnt like it, just these overly dramaric dialogues sicken me and I knew Will could do better. I know it’s the fault of noble fantasm, but still. He really should just face and fix all his family problems instead of running away and have a discussion with his current family. But it’s good that character has faults, OP characters who bene the world to go their way are way worse

Tbh, the last two paragraphs are what the mc should do from the beginning when he realized the NP. Why took so long just to listen to what your inner trauma has to say about you. Feel to me like a silly drama that is filly added to the story.

Good chap man facing his problems is good

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