The story had a great start, and great build up to the rest of the story. Grammar isnt actually bad, and somewhat unnoticable, it does steadily get better chapter by chapter. The plot and story is going great, not much else to say here. The world buildup is written suprisingly well, most rwby fanfics have terrible world background and development, they can be shallow, unlanded and not make any sense (unrealistic), go against the plot and make said plot look ridiculously stupid, or just lack and neglect the world around them. This fanfic however doesn't do any of that from what I've read so far, and is being written and developed quit well, good job on that one author.
