Translation: Either the author sure loves to repeat himself or it’s the by product of what’s obviously barely edited MTL. I feel the truth is somewhere in the middle.
Characters: At this stage feel pretty one-dimensional, but interactions so far have been pretty light — who knows, they may gain some depth in the future (if this is picked).
Word Building: Is as can be expected of novels of these kind, but again that could very well change in the future as this is only the beginning of the story.
Overall: It’s okay — not great, but not terrible either. And it’s only 20 chapters, so why not give it a shot?