Witchhazel
I like it!! the imagery of the memory adds a lot more "show, don't tell" too it as well as making the readers experience the same sort of sad nostalgia that she is experiencing, and im really glad you kept the speech because it's really well worded and solidifies what she implied with the memory. I think it would be worth adding another kiss so you can keep the line of him saying "did that count?" because we didn't really get to see him respond beyond loosely accepting her words on a very hesitant physical level (and also because I really like that line xD it's funny, but also gives hope for his spirit returning a little)
LadyAlex:thats why I was thinking it might be worth adding another kiss, having "that doesn't count" at the beginning and "does that count?" at the end would wrap the chapter up quite nicely ☺ but you're a very talented writer, I think you can easily tie that in to the next chapter!! or if it doesn't fit the feel anymore, I still immensely enjoyed reading this chapter (both versions 😉) so I have no complaints!! ❤
this episode was do sweet omg... so gentle and full of love, and this apology felt like he was trying to genuinely make amends for their future rather than him just being sorry that he got caught ❤❤ he's going to get better now that he's not resisting and suppressing the love that they so clearly share for each other 🥰