Comments of chapter undefined of The Bloody Angel

oh Trek is suspicious

Nice plot generated here. Just the writing portion needs a little improvement

Hi, so I just finished reading both chapters. The plot is good, and I truly has potential. The transitions between sentences are sometimes off, but not too much to lose a reader's interest. There seems to be alot of action and fighting scenario in your novel and I hope you can make it work. A few spelling mistakes but that is forgiven. Try working on a comp, use Microsoft word first to chek for spelling mistakes before uploading your work here. It's tedious but it will help. I can't give further critic on the novel itself because two chaps is too short to judge someone's work. I hope you update soon. Best of luck us. -the only limit to one's ability is the limit we impose on our selves..