Comments of chapter undefined of Unlimited Borrowing System

When I'm thinking of a foreign name, I thought Hugo would be good. But when I written the first line I realized what I did. I hope Hugo Boss don't mind this🤣🤣🤣

I like how straight to the point you pushed the plot, it fits the genre so well! And you are a natural with dialogues, something most authors struggle with! And, Boss Hugo! You got me here! 🤣

your English just right. the chapter is one to drive you to turn to the next but hey try describing the environment more just like the characters in the plot overall I think it's a nice book

Nice intro. English cool

a nice start of the book. good with the dialogues... there's few point missing in the descriptions and the depth... I recommend to do a editing once you have time...

Great start so far! Your English is fantastic! Really clean and easy to follow (:

I like it when I story get me curious and I feel curious right now. What is in the box?

Oh, sad. I feel pity for the two brothers.

Overall it's a good chapter that does what a first chapter needs to do: introduce the MC and show this is a person worth investing in, introduce tension and create a hook that'll keep readers reading. I don't know what people has been telling you about first chapters being 'catchy' but I find this chapter plenty catchy, myself.

Great start here. Looking forward to the next chapter [img=recommend]