Ahem, so, my thoughts after reading a few chapters.
The writing quality is slightly down, but from the looks of it, this seems like the book of a new author so that can't be helped. No author's first or even second book is ever good, including my own.
The overall story is great, but the interaction between the characters seemed forced. This is a common occurrence when starting a novel, even though you have the topic the characters are going to talk about in your head, it's just hard to write it out and make it sound natural. Character interactions are something I struggle with to this day, and it never gets easy, you just have to build up experience as you write and learn from your past mistakes.
This story is about romance and vampires, a common troupe which can be found in all forms of media. I suggest the author view some of these stories and try to pick apart what makes that vampire romance story enjoyable to him/her. When you find those points try to incorporate them into your book, and I'm not talking about the simple stuff, I'm talking about how the characters talk as well as the words and phrases they use. And if the author has ever read a vampire romance novel before, it's especially good to pay close attention to how those authors write the things you might be struggling with.
This is what I do every time I pick up a book to read, I look at how that author deals with the things I'm struggling with, and try to learn from his or her writing style.
I have more to say but this getting long so imma end it here. But if you've reached this for I suggest you give this book a try, it's good to support an upcoming author as you may never know if they'll one day right one of your favourite books.[img=recommend][img=recommend]
