Comments of chapter undefined of Marvels SuperMutant

death of yinsen is not well thought especially with Tony's reaction at his death which was indirectly caused by Tony. it's like out of character

Tony after he see yinsen died.

I kinda liked Tony's budy when I first saw the movie, the author had a good and original idea when he brought the idea to save him. Then the author became 2lazy and didn't include the content. He came to save Yensen and Tony, but in the end, things end up just like the movie with only Tony surviving for no good reasons (idc about Fury comming). The chapter didn't bring any advancement in the story and was boring. These kind of chapters is generally a sign of tiredness or a lack of ideas, meaning the fic will probably end very soon for whatever reason...

I was a little disappointed with this chapter. Your MC's disregard for Yensin's life for example. The MC spent all that effort to save him, then fails utterly in the end. It makes his reason for being present during that situation unnecessary(Unless you were trying to show that fate is inevitable, still, maybe try being less callous about it next time. It's not good if your MC seems like to much of a sociopath if he is intended to read like a hero, just saying!). You also show a lack of regard towards his death(The reason your MC seems like a sociopath), not just from the MC but Tony as well(you even mentioned that his death gave Tony PTSD, so why would he just carry on like he had nothing to to with it?). Also, as a general rule of thumb, do NOT contradict yourself so much when your writing ANY story(For an intended effect it's fine, but only so often. Such as having your MC learn a lesson or something along those lines). It tends to make it seem like you didn't know what you actually wanted to write. It's also somewhat confusing for your readers. Please don't take this comment as judgment, it's not. I just wanted to stress the issues that I noticed. Thx for the chapter.

Yeah this wasnt a good chapter at all.... him going to afganistan was pointless, found out that he is a fanboy of tony since there was no reason for him to even “save” him. Just not a good chapter

Painful chapter. I have to agree that the entire Yinsen thing was pointless. His death, especially as a result of Tony's actions, would have hit him harder. And the MC really should have been able to prevent it.

Lady death

Thanks for the chapter!

Meh .. it dies

It get sucker every day man is like a chinese novel over again

Emma forst

Exp

Thanks for the chapter on a good story

More More More Pleeeeeeeeease

I miss this fiction

more pls

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Thanks for the chapter Wish you well author Keep up the good work

update pleade

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