MITCHIEWilliams
your story is really good. the plot is so nice. but you can improve your book by fixing the spelling error and grammar so that readers can understand more. the ending is a bit rush maybe you can change it a little bit, put a situation where yaozhu talk with liya and chap about how their son felt after his parents died in third pov. in that chapter you can tell when yaozhu and liya died and so on. i hope what i commented does not hurt you in any way. this is just my opinion and suggestions, you want to accept it or not, it it is your choice. also can i wish for bonus chapters for yaozhu and liya? pretty please? i need more of their interactions