Comments of chapter undefined of Rattus Rex
Rattus Rex
Winterwisps
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Riyah404Lv4Riyah404
I think Halifax was too young for that seat., If that is so important to him, he should have had a plan b., in case all else fails since he was certain that many would not agree to his desire for balance.,
Riyah404Lv4Riyah404
I also thought about the chapter becoming too long because of that. But maybe you can start on the last part and the MC asking himself where did his plan go wrong. Just a suggestion., :)
Winterwisps:I completely agree. The way it is now, Halifax actually comes out as a little bit of an incompetent buffoon, which is unfortunate when he's supposed to be all smart-like. I thought of ways to improve this, but couldn't think of one that didn't involve spending a lot more time in this first world, and I didn't want to drag it on for too long. So, it's kind of a compromise.
