This needs some editing. Some quotations start, and never end. It gets hard to distinguish the dialogue from the narration.
"This is how it should start, and end; when someone is talking."
'This is the standardized notation for how thoughts(Internal Dialogue) are communicated in published stories.'
-I'm not quite sure what this is, I think you use it to indicate internal dialogue, but usually, there isn't a closing mark, so...-
There's some rough grammar, and poor word choice but it isn't a bad fic.
