Mysterious_Pen
Hey Mr. Author. One small tip. Just in this first chapter there's a big glaring error: You lack word diversity. In about the first 20 paragraphs you say 'Qin Yi' in like 18 of them. It also happens later in the chapter with a dozen or so paragraphs starting with or containing 'Qin Yi'. Also looking at the start of chapter 2 you do it more. You need to diversify a little bit or it gets tiring to read very quickly.