ilovepizza9
Okay so this is good but...I don't see a future, is he a troll or what is he like he is so random and helpful...like super helpful not only that but he provides ppl with powers without thinking. I know he is op but he should have a little common sense he is what 32 or something so he should have that, unless he died in a anime world and not our world then this way I can get it....for example Naruto having ki how it's not universal energy ? Why would he give that to him or Naruto saying he should teach him how to create stuff...it's good novel but idk if you have a future vision about this and how long would each world takes? This is the problem with op characters u are suppose to focus on character interaction and the world buildup since power wise he is invincible.
Your writing style seperated your main character as a powerful being and destroy the your characters adventure and fun outright by going to naruto . You are giving oportunitys to naruto and you want to him to travel other worlds like he is the fucking main character. You destroyed whole naruto world adventure of your character and thinking other main characters more than your own written caracter . If you write a main character you can freely write it I don't bother you, but at least tell us who the fucking main character of your novel !!! And where is the adventure and world exploring of yor character because all I see is NARUTO and his begining to multiverse adventure. Sorry if I am harsh but at least you should understand your writing is naruto fanfiction not your main character fanfiction. You should rewrite it.