LivingVoid
I'll be lenient because this is your first book but the words seems blad with no emotions, you're not bringing out the real essence of your art. Your words are meant to make the reader have a vivid imagination of the scenery, to make the reader delve really into the fantasy. I really like the direction which I presume the book is moving in and I hope you improve your writing style.
Yeah, the truth is we do that a lot assuming what's going to happen, but it's something that happens involuntarily when you read a lot that's why cliche stories are boring most of the time, you're right that we shouldn't share those opinions in the comments. I usually ignore them and don't comment on it or when I do comment I use them as hypothetical jokes but if that bothers you I won't, Thanks for writing, I think I will enjoy this novel.đđđđ