There is plenty of red temple, so when he ask lord velaryon to meet him at the red temple it lack details. Wich one? why would lord velaryon cross the narrow sea in weeks journey to meet a recently legitimed bastard with the biggest debt of westeros just behind the crown????
Yeah im sorry i cant continue reading this story.. everything is either rushed or forced and the fact that he is still a kid but able to do all of these things just ruin the story, doesnt matter if its a fanfic. Good luck with the rest of your fic!
the interactions seem, I don't know, rehearsed? I liked that you explained the fact that he has such an ***** mentality (since he matures faster) but it is still strange that adults give so much relevance to a child's word
