Comments of chapter undefined of The Ancients World
The Ancients World
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I didn't really notice the change in the writing format. I don't mean that it's bad it's actually as good as it always has been. But I have to say that making "The 14000 Mile Journey" with 12 parts is kinda long, and at least for me it feels unnecessary. I understand Hailey's and Cera's character development for a bit, but for some reason it feels weird. Cera wont suddenly transform into a kind and helpful person only because Hailey told him he is manipulative and a control freak. at the same time Hailey feels like the same self centered woman every time she is jealous of Cera's class or when she says that Cera is acting in a worse way then he used to, even though he literally saved them all. I know that I might be the only one that feels this way, just wanted to voice out my opinion (。_。)
I'm not trying to say your wrong, because you're right. 12 chapters is a lot, its a sacrifice I have to do to give the world, characters, and plot depth. Its a valuable trade for meaningful multi-dimensional characters as well as great world building and plot progress.
Dante_Luca:Fair enough I guess, you do you.
Good question. I think Zern should have been harsh with his mom, dad, and sister. He should have explained why he wants them to be strong. That because they are immortal now, that opens a bigger door for the evil, greedy, power hungry people in the world. That all of the players can become slaves to the powerful people of the world and not just to other players.
I dont know what you changed in your writing but it was more than just evident. it was profound. honestly had i not read your note beforehand id have believed this was written by someone new. Id only recommend going back and redoing the first 100+ chapters this way, you would gain (and sustain) many more readers. id almost bailed on this story twice (around chapters 40 and 75.) in a single chapter you made this jump from my #5 book to my #2. i look forward to more like this and hope you can keep it up!
