Rosemary_2218
the beginning of this story is interesting, although I will sounds like complete idiot on most comments but the grammar usage and the flow of the story are good enough. as for description the MC description at the start doesn't felt like it was that important to be mentioned but eh, another thing I'm confused of is the location. is it a room or a forest or what? if it's a room then how come she can see the sky?(although blocked by a chopping board)
Wonderful premise! The tone of the work is jovial and entertaining!! The descriptions are well thought out however I felt the descriptions of the MC’s appearance to be kinda distracting and disrupting the flow in the begging but the latter parts were quite enjoyable. Looking forward to the rest of the chapters [img=recommend]
Whether one is familiar with 'System' genre/niche really helps you understand what you're getting yourself into 🤣 I feel worried for the MC What I liked about this chapter: 1. The System's Board (Message Screen, Information Box etc.) is pink instead of the usual shade of blue 2. We're in Dec 1, 2020 people woo! 3. Girl knows what she wants I'm an easy to please reader, I came here to see how the relationship develops between Voldemort, and though we haven't even seen the dude, I'm shipping them in the back of my head. It's been a long time since I read fanfiction, falling a bit to the belief that originals are better but this is certainly something that tugs your heartstrings :3 or rather the concept is really good and fanfiction allows you to be hella creative and think of this entertaining and amazing scenarios 💕