Phantowhite
At first a Said No rewrite but honestly as long as You keep this going thats fine Also still kinda like the idea of the whole monster girl aspect as it makes it so people who aren’t Major dragon ball fans can feel caught up Also could you like if your going to rewrite put their mom into like a coma instead of death cause i almost cried the firs time i read this
if u rewrite it maybe do something like she still reincarnates as Mira & having Android 21 as her main battle form & her demon form as her berserk form & u can keep the curse of Echidna but have it tie into her other forms 4 example if she turned n2 a harpy or lamia something happens were she somehow trasfers/infects some1 with that form but they don't gain any new powers from that form unless it can fly or breathe underwater but they can get a small increase 2 their physical abilities i/e a little bit stronger, better eyesight, smell, hearing, reflexes & so on also if u go that route & u still want 2 boost some of the characters powers if u match the right monster it would give a valid reason 4 the power boost without adding any new abilitys for example you could turn Todoroki come to a chimera of some sort since all they r is a mix of 2 or more creatures & 4 Midoriya using a monster with high defense would make the most sense I think cuz he already has the potential 2b stonger then Allmight but his body can't normally handle all that power so using a high defense type monster would work cuz his body would end up more resilient that's just some ideas I had hope it helps
if you don't enjoy your current story rewriting is fine... as for ideas for possible changes I wouldn't mind seeing a monster girl summoning only (she was supposed to be the mother of monsters so creating them from nothing makes sense to me), have 21 be something akin to Sakura's inner self in Naruto but a permanent seperate entity capable of brief merging giving a similar effect to a berserk skill in games, and perhaps for the system you can make it so instead of being a God given gift; she creates an AI or just a high tech computing program attached to a neural implant or contact lense which calculates stats and keeps track of what she learns about her abilities... anyways glad to see you're back and I hope things get better for you
Why not keep this story and make another version? then you can write depending on which you got an idea? As for changes, i would only have 1 big change and a few minor things Big one : No System / or change it into more like a Pc-interface where she can work on her ideas/invention/experiments. (21 being the genius she is, all her data would be worldchangeing or can be misused! So for it being a savetyline) Medium change: About their Mother dying by her birth - change it into a heavy coma, that would give elfman a far better reason to work his a*s off than simbly wanting a better live for the family when the father is a piece of trash. You can keep the father being an abusive bastard until Elfman finds it out and puts him to jail. Smaller change: - Not genderbending all the maincast xD you can change 1-2 or simply make originalcharaktere fill the yuriharem. - personally i would like to have Mira(21) a bond/relationship with Himiko, be it friend or more dunno. - about her Game making, let her make some more games pls^^ - Lastly ALL FOR ONE´s entry, change it to another nutjob who will kidnap her and she can get out with her own strenght or with the help of a eventual good friend/lover to be from the lab. yeah, that puts it together from my side^^
Keep the new personality (shes been reborn a 2nd chance at life), drop the system, Evil android should definitely resurrect in her head like an alter ego at some point, her quirk should just be her majin form with all the side abilities like strength, speed, and intellect. these are just my thoughts on it keep up the great work and hope you'll feel better soon.