Harem_Squad
I wrote this fanfic just for fun on my phone. I never ask for donation or receiving any money from this. Since i'm not a native english speaker, you will find many grammar mistakes in this fanfic. Hope you enjoy to read this fanfic. Also don't force me or tell me to fix the grammar since i don't have time and i wrote this only in my free time. Thanks...
While the concept of this fanfic is really good, the author doesn't make any efforts into actually telling the story, there are barely any conversations. In a sense, this fanfic is like a report, or a summary of a story if you will, but not really a story. The world building is close to inexistent (even if it's One Piece so readers should already know it by now, if only marginally) and it is the same for the character development. We have almost nk info on the Mc, and we don't have any conversation between them. As I said, it's more of a summary than a true story, which is sad because the concept is really good and fairly appealing. I know there aren't many chapters yet (12 as of writing this review) but as long as the author doesn't put more effort to make of this idea a true story instead of a summary, I'm dropping it now, but will keep it in my library.
well its interesting because mc didn't use system to always purchase Instant OP Power, beside the early chapter & even then he have to work hard to truly become as powerful as these Famous Pirate. also the logical reaction & interaction between fan-fiction world & Real World is interesting as well & manage to help reader keep read this story despite that more than half of content of each chapter id about re-writing cannon plot story with nonexistence character interaction. it's still a few chapter so future reviee may come at Comment section.
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Itβs not good. Promise me to not read this cuz itβll just go down the hill after like 20 chaptersβ¦β¦β¦β¦β¦β¦The straw hats stats are dumb and unexpectedβ¦β¦β¦New World bounty hunters comes in to hunt them in PARADISE even when their bounties arenβt even high enough to get attentionβ¦β¦β¦. They killed all of them, especially someone known as the βSnake Handsβ who use a sea stone glove with his snake like martial art to attack his enemies, and for defense he has obs haki thatβll let him see 2 sec in the future yet he got killed by the Mc cuz the Mc has 10 sec in the future obs hakiβ¦β¦.. luffy kills peopleβ¦β¦. They still have Going Merry yet they can already kill bounty hunters from New Worldβ¦.. again the stats for the Straw Hats are dumb, most of them have A and S with luffy being s+ in SECOND GEAR!
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