Comments of chapter undefined of Redeeming The Golden Ticket To Life

This chapter was a bit confusing, I had no idea who was talking and which POV it was. Could be I read it too fast and skimmed it through but yeah. It would be nice with more emotional description.

I found this chapter very confusing. It was shifting from one scene to another too fast. I wish there were more details and I felt like the story was jumping from one point to another before finishing the first. Hope this helps.

man, she was sharp and I like sharp

This chapter... it felt really rushed. It didn’t have that much details either. Switching POV is a good idea to make sure the reader understands every character’s thought process, but, in this chapter, it wasn’t delivered too well. It felt like when you switched POV, you confused yourself (author)

I liked it, I’m assuming you edited the chapter to clarify the point of views. Can’t wait to see how the story will progress.

likeee itt!!! thankyou for writing this

You can definitely correct the punctuation here, especially the run-ons.

Let me know, How you feel about the Big Buddha?