Comments of chapter undefined of Parallel Trials of a Somewhat Hero

Heya Author! I'm also an author of my own book which is doing decent, seeing how this one hasn't gotten many views yet I figured I'd give a bit of feedback. Thos novel's main problem thus far is clarity, things move all over the place constantly, never staying at one place. A quick fix to this is making divisions with - - - - - and in later chaps you can try making things such as changes in character or time clearer in different ways. Second tip is to keep going, not having a lot of views after 70 chaps can be discouraging, I know. But at some point you'll have a massive boost. I believe I had it at 110-120. Before that I had like 100k views. Now its well over a million. Just jeep doing your daily uploads, posting them at the same time every day. If you can do 2 a day occasionally

thank you for the feedback!