Comments of chapter undefined of Lucifer's Descendant System
Lucifer's Descendant System
Zhanye
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Feedback to author: I think you need to work on showing rather than telling the story bc to me some of it comes across as you informing us of what's happening rather than allowing us (the reader) to experience the world and characters your creating from your words if that makes any sense. Also I'm not trashing the story at all. I do enjoy it but would like to see you improve as a writer so that I can enjoy it more
