Lo_ngl
I haven't read many novels on this app, but your grammar is very good compared to what I've read thus far. There's not much I would have changed here aside from a sentence or two and that one spelling error I commented above for. This was a good first chapter. It didn't unveil too many details about the game, so it really reels in the reader curiosity to learn more. Keep tossing that bait man. L.O. gives me that WoW vibe. Very popular, not everyone could afford it, or well at least I couldn't growing up. I played f2p MMOS like Runescape and Maplestory for the most part during my adolescence years back in 03. Fun stuff!